Finished it. It was very good.
I'd say the screenplay was outstanding. I have no comments on dialogue, action and that kind of stuff. I have read a few screenplays on Amazon Studios and stuff, and the quality of this script was the best I've seen in a feature length script that was not written by a proffesional writer. Outstanding!
And for the story:
It kept being interested. I actually write a lot myself, but reading is not my strongest point. That's why I had to cut my read in half. It had nothing to do with your story being uninteresting. The pacing and style were pretty good.
However, the story itself is not really my taste. Therefor, I do not have any points to improve your story.
I do have one question though.
You and I have collaborated in a short script entitled "The Forsaken Planet", that was also post-apocalyptic and follows a same kind of story. Are you writing more post-apocalyptic stories, or is this actually more of an spin-off from your idea for 'The Forskaken Planet'?
I'd say the screenplay was outstanding. I have no comments on dialogue, action and that kind of stuff. I have read a few screenplays on Amazon Studios and stuff, and the quality of this script was the best I've seen in a feature length script that was not written by a proffesional writer. Outstanding!
And for the story:
It kept being interested. I actually write a lot myself, but reading is not my strongest point. That's why I had to cut my read in half. It had nothing to do with your story being uninteresting. The pacing and style were pretty good.
However, the story itself is not really my taste. Therefor, I do not have any points to improve your story.
I do have one question though.
You and I have collaborated in a short script entitled "The Forsaken Planet", that was also post-apocalyptic and follows a same kind of story. Are you writing more post-apocalyptic stories, or is this actually more of an spin-off from your idea for 'The Forskaken Planet'?
David emerges from the store slowly. He braces himself against a parked car and then keeps on walking in a nightmarish daze.
WE PULL BACK as David blends in with dozens and dozens of ordinary people, walking on an ordinary street, in an ordinary city.
WE PULL BACK as David blends in with dozens and dozens of ordinary people, walking on an ordinary street, in an ordinary city.
