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Crazy Eight wrote:
Michaelf2225 wrote:forgot to post this



it's bad, but i'm learning

watch if you guys want; feedback would be greatly appreciated


Good work. Keep hitting the grind.

If I had one big piece of advice, it'd be to remember to somehow wrap everything that happens on screen up into the fundamental story being told, in this case: the strained relationship between your two leads. From the dialogue to the image, try to abide by this. Why do we see a montage of her making coffee? Does it tell us anything about her character or the story? What does the legal lingo conversation in the park have to do with their relationship? Could this stuff be cut with little effect on the narrative or the character's relationships? Just some things to think about. Good job though, you're in the right direction.

I appreciate the feedback since all I got from my lab was that the jump from City Hall to Penn's Landing which, while walkable, is like 3/4's of a mile and probably a bit unrealistic. It's a fair criticism, but not exactly what I was looking for :lol:

The whole legal conversation was a poor attempt at drawing a parallel between my female character's feelings and the feelings of this "crazy" lady that came into my male character's work - but, you're at least the second person that didn't see what I was trying to do, so I guess it didn't really work...

And yep, upon my rewatches of it, I definitely should have cut the montage - or, at least shorten it to just a shot or two. Seriously though, thanks for the advice!
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Currently scoring To Err is Human: A Patient Safety Documentary for Mike Eisenberg (frequent guest on the defunct NF podcast).

And it's kicking my ass. It's feature-length and wall-to-wall music. Gonna be a good doc tho. Excited to start sharing stuff when I can.
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TeddyBlass wrote:Currently scoring To Err is Human: A Patient Safety Documentary for Mike Eisenberg (frequent guest on the defunct NF podcast).

And it's kicking my ass. It's feature-length and wall-to-wall music. Gonna be a good doc tho. Excited to start sharing stuff when I can.


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TeddyBlass wrote:Currently scoring To Err is Human: A Patient Safety Documentary for Mike Eisenberg (frequent guest on the defunct NF podcast).

And it's kicking my ass. It's feature-length and wall-to-wall music. Gonna be a good doc tho. Excited to start sharing stuff when I can.


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shooting a sizzle reel/promo thing for what will hopefully be my junior year film. making a promo so our faculty will like us more and our vision enough to let us make the full ten minute thing. there's ten films in the running and two are gonna get cut so we're going extra to make sure we dont. and it's a dramatic piece and i do exclusively comedy so this'll be interesting for me persoanlly
^i want updates


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mchekhov 2: Chek Harder wrote:

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I am currently working on a script for a movie set in my college, it will be a romantic-comedy-drama. Never thought that would be my 1st script looking at the movies I like.
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